After
writing the first few pages of my researched argument I feel more confident as
my research grows. The first few pages were a little difficult attempting to
reach the required page numbers, but I feel that I discovered for information
to assist my argument. This causes me to worry that I will struggle making the
final page requirements, but will hopefully be able to do so. I know that my
research is growing stronger as I continue to discover more information on the
topic. I know my writing was not as strong as it can be in the first few pages
because my surroundings are not an excuse, but I know that I will need to work
harder on the next section. I need to improve on the fluidity of my sentences.
A lot of my sentences, especially in the first two paragraphs, are fragments
and sounds like lists. I also added an example of a gluten-free store in my
hometown. I understand that this example might not belong in the part one of
the researched argument, but I can find other local examples to discuss later
in the argument. If I move this
point to the research part two I will need to find another point that will
support the argument in part one. Unfortunately my computer saved my paper in
the wrong font making the paper fall a little short of the requirement. I will
need to add some more information because of this. I will need to read through
my part one to correct a few grammatical errors that I overlooked during the
writing process. There were also a few word choices that I will need to look
over to see if there is a better option. Fortunately my thesis fits well and I
do not feel that I will have to change it in the future. I like the idea that
you suggested of discussing why an athlete without celiac disease would want to
go on a gluten-free diet. I plan on doing more research on that idea and adding
it to my part one and moving the
example of the Nerdy Birdy to part two.
Tuesday, October 28, 2014
Thursday, October 23, 2014
"Food and Culture Presentation Review"
So
far with the food and culture presentations I enjoyed Rachel’s and mine
presentation on Germany. This is mainly because I am half German and was
interested in learning more about the German culture. I learned that although
they used to eat five meals, today they eat three meals a day just like we do
in America. The only thing different was that in Germany they to have kaffee
and kuchen on Sundays, which stands for coffee and cake. I remember when
looking through pictures of the examples they all looks very delicious. I found
it fascinating that the different countries had different foods centered around
their holidays than what we have. For example, for Christmas in Germany they
have fish for their main course, while in America we have turkey or ham. Their
holiday, Fasching, would resemble Mardi Gras in America. For that celebration
the Germans indulge in soft pretzels, kutteln, and deep fried donuts. While I
did not find the soup with cow’s stomach very appetizing, I could enjoy the
soft pretzels and fried donuts. I
thought it was random that they attempt to completely avoid garlic simply
because of the smell. In Germany they are very proud of their bread making
methods and one can find pretzels at basically any meal. Other foods that come
from Germany include, the hamburger, deviled eggs, and beer. One candy that I
enjoy that comes from Germany is the heribo gummy bears. Those are the only
gummy bears that I will eat. I also enjoyed the video that we played showing
the people attempting to pronounce and taste the different German foods. One
restaurant that I forgot to talk about, but is well known, is the Hofbrauhaus. I
have eaten at one of these both in America and in Germany. They are famous for
their enormous beer mugs, huge pretzels, and other quality German food. They
serve huge portions and have many different types of sausage. One will never
leave that place with an empty stomach, unless they do not like German food. I hope
one day to go back to Germany so I can once again sample other German foods and
see the culture.
Tuesday, October 14, 2014
Writing Reflection -Paper Proposal
If
I could I had the time to make changes in my paper proposal I would take more
time to look at my sources. My sources need improvement and I should have
organized the ones I have and canceled out the ones that I feel wont work
anymore. I know that I am in need of more sources and I should have spent time
searching for more that supported my argument. The easiest part of the
assignment was discussing the issues I encounter while working on my research
and the problems I foresee I will have while writing the paper. I already knew
that I was having trouble finding sources that incorporated, both the
gluten-free diet and athletes on the gluten-free diet. Sources with on this
topic are easy to find on the web, but when searching for credible sources not
many appear. It was also easy to work out the details of the argument. I want
to argue that a gluten-free diet will not affect an athlete’s performance, but
I knew there would be stipulations in which the diet would work. These
situations include when an athlete has celiac disease and when the diet causes
the athlete to develop a healthy eating style. I can explain why both of these
cases are successful with and without the presence of gluten. The hardest part
of the assignment was attempting to figure out how I could find more credible
sources related to my topic. Not having all of my sources made it difficult to
describe how I am going to use each of my sources because I am not confident
that I am still using all of them. I was also hard describing my argument in
the beginning because of the stipulations. Once I determined how I could
explain the stipulations it made my argument more effective. The paper proposal
did help me narrow down my ideas for the final research paper. I was unsure
that I could write the researched argument on my topic, but after the paper
proposal I no longer feel the need to change my topic. I allowed me to work out
the kinks, define what I am arguing, and know what I need to work on to make my
argument effective.
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